江蘇省沭陽如東中學高考英語一輪復習作文指導 課件(共22張PPT) .ppt

高三英語作文講評高三英語作文講評 Rudong Senior High school Hua Haiyan 3Analysis & DiscussionCorrection& Polishing upPresentation & Comment123TASKS：WritingWriting最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。 最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。語廣播站投稿。 Task 1：Analysis & Discussion注意：注意：（1）對所給要點逐一陳述，適當發(fā)揮，不要簡單翻譯。）對所給要點逐一陳述，適當發(fā)揮，不要簡單翻譯。（2）詞數(shù)）詞數(shù)150左右。開頭已經寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)。左右。開頭已經寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)。 Nowadays, an increasing number of students are suffering from mental problems, which has aroused public concern. According to a survey conducted recently, _問題問題有心理健康問題的學生：男生占總數(shù)的有心理健康問題的學生：男生占總數(shù)的16.2% ，女生，女生占占11.4% 。情緒問題：如過度焦慮、自卑情緒問題：如過度焦慮、自卑行為問題：如撒謊、偷竊行為問題：如撒謊、偷竊 原因原因父母過多懲罰、過分干涉、家庭不和睦父母過多懲罰、過分干涉、家庭不和睦自身學習壓力過大、與周圍的人際關系不融洽自身學習壓力過大、與周圍的人際關系不融洽建議建議不少于兩點。不少于兩點。最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。 Task 1: Analysis & DiscussionParagraph 1: Phrases1.情緒問題情緒問題 / 行為問題行為問題2. 過度焦慮過度焦慮3. 自卑自卑 4. 撒謊、偷竊撒謊、偷竊emotion / emotional problems behavior / behavioral problems be excessively anxious show excessive anxiety lack confidence feel inferior to otherstell lies / commit theft最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。 Paragraph1: Sentences如何拓展句子？如何拓展句子？-補充句子成分，如補充句子成分，如定語、狀語定語、狀語等；等；-使用使用復合句、非謂語動詞復合句、非謂語動詞等；等；-補充內容信息，如補充內容信息，如目的、結果、條件、原因目的、結果、條件、原因等。等。Paragraph 1: Sentences情緒問題：焦慮、自卑；情緒問題：焦慮、自卑；.行為問題：撒謊、偷竊；行為問題：撒謊、偷竊；. 1._, some students become too anxious about their future.（原因）（原因） 2. Some students cant handle anxiety properly, _ _. (結果）結果） 3. With mental problems, many teenagers have bad behaviors _ (舉例）舉例） For lack of confidencewhich makes it difficult for them to be confidentthus contributing to their emotional problem.such as telling lies and committing theft最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。 Sample：Nowadays, an increasing number of students are suffering from mental problems, which has aroused public concern. According to a survey conducted recently, among the students who suffer from mental problems, boys account for about 16.2% while girls make up 11.4%. In terms of emotional problems, many students are excessively anxious, lack self-confidence or get angry easily. As for behavior problems, some students tend to tell lies and commit theft and some even withdraw from people and the world around them. 最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。 Appreciation:1. Among students who have mental problems, boys make up 16.2% while girls account for 11.4%. It is common that they suffer from many emotional and behavior problems .Too much anxiety and lack of confidence lead to emotional problems, which make them feel they are inferior to others. Whats worse, some of them often tell lies, commit theft, consequently ending up in prison. （張紀（張紀)2.Among all kinds of problems, excessive anxiety and loss of confidence become the most serious emotional problems, which directly lead to some behavioral problems, such as lying ,stealing .These bad behaviors will have a bad effect on their life. (朱可心）朱可心） Paragraph 2: Reasons 1. 1.父母過多懲罰、過分干涉、家庭不和睦父母過多懲罰、過分干涉、家庭不和睦Students are often punished severely by parents if they fail to do as instructed, which causes a tense family relationship. Parents interfere in their studies and life too much, thus making them unable to get along well with their children. There are many reasons lying behind the problem. Several factors contribute to the worrying situation. 最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。 Burdened with too much pressure, students are unwilling to communicate with people around. Suffering from heavy pressure from school and family, students always find it hard to get along well with people around./ to live in harmony with others. 2.自身學習壓力過大、與周圍的人際關系不融洽自身學習壓力過大、與周圍的人際關系不融洽最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。 Polish up the paragraph:Parents are very strict and punish them too much. They often interfere in their studies and life . There is a tense family relationship. Students have great pressure from study and can not get along well with others. All these bring about their mental problems. 最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。 Appreciation1.父母過多懲罰、過分干涉、家庭不和睦父母過多懲罰、過分干涉、家庭不和睦2.自身學習壓力過大、與周圍的人際關系不融洽自身學習壓力過大、與周圍的人際關系不融洽Various factors may account for the worrying situation. For one thing, parents tend to punish their children too often for their poor academic performance and excessively interfere in their childrens life and study, which undoubtedly makes it impossible to build a harmonious family. For another, heavy burden from their school work and lack of communication with people around may be an invitation to their mental problems. 最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。 Paragraph 3: SuggestionsAs adults, parents_. teachers_ _ .As students, we _. are supposed to create a harmonious atmosphere are expected to play an important role in helping students/ give them guidanceought to take a positive attitude strike a balance between study and relaxation. So severe is the problem that we must find effective solutions as quickly as possible.最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。 Appreciation In my opinion, it is high time to take measures before everything becomes too late. As adults, parents should understand their children and create a harmonious atmosphere for them so that they can live happily. Teachers also play an important role in helping students face challenges bravely. But most importantly, teenagers themselves should take a positive attitude towards life, learning to strike a balance between study and relaxation. As long as we join forces, our effort will pay off finally. Work in groups of four to correct your composition and polish it up, trying to use what youve learned in this period. Task 2: Polishing up your own composition最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。 Task 3: Presentation & Comment1. Language ( words ; phrases; sentences ; fluency; accuracy)2. Content 3. Linking words (coherency 連貫連貫)4. Handwriting What makes a good article ?Required contents Proper structureWide range of vocabulary Appropriate use of transitionBeautiful handwriting最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。 Consolidation:假如你是某校學生張華，最近一位名叫假如你是某校學生張華，最近一位名叫Mike的加拿大學的加拿大學生來你班學習?，F(xiàn)在，他正為融入新的集體感到苦惱。生來你班學習?，F(xiàn)在，他正為融入新的集體感到苦惱。請根據(jù)下表所列要點用英語給他發(fā)一個電子郵件：請根據(jù)下表所列要點用英語給他發(fā)一個電子郵件： 分析原因分析原因1.1.語言不通；語言不通； 2.2.文化差異；文化差異； 3. 3. 提出建議提出建議1.1. 多交朋友多交朋友 2. 2. 遇事求助遇事求助3. . 3. . 提供幫助提供幫助至少兩點至少兩點最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。 Assignment:1. Correct your composition and find out several good sentences in it. 2. Practice writing another composition. 最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。 Thanks for your cooperation !最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提最近，調查發(fā)現(xiàn)越來越多的學生有了心理問題，這引起了社會的極大關注。請你根據(jù)所提供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。供的信息用英語寫一篇文章，向學校英語廣播站投稿。